Fragmented Ideas

Hey guys, i want you to read my reflection paper and analyze the structure well.

Salamat, Mama, sa Pahinumdom - Reflection Paper

An old friend once said, “The only way to truly love someone is to realize that they can be lost.” I never really understood this until I read “Salamat, Mama, sa Pahinumdom” During our literature class our teacher asked our classmate “If you were Sam, what would you do when Melba leaves you?” “I would do anything to get her back, and I’d change my ways for our family” was the response I heard. It was then that I understood the theme “Love is not enough.”

The problem is when the girl says yes, we are clouded by the illusion that they are ours forever. Well, for us men at least. But when you see them walk away, you realize that Love wasn’t enough. For a relationship to work, you’ve got to have not only love, but patience and perseverance as well. Why? Find me a couple that has never been in a fight, or even in a small argument or misunderstanding. Even if you trek around the world and back, you will never find what you’re searching for, for it is impossible to have a flawless relationship.

What Sam did was wrong, but he was not the only one to blame. When you get married, you made a vow to your spouse to love them for better, for worse, for rich or for poor, in sickness and in health, until death do you part. Melba took the easy way out and left. She should have stayed and asked Sam to change. If Sam truly loved her, then he would have agreed. Melba was scared, and she had every right to be, but abandoning her husband wasn’t the right thing to do. There is a solution to every problem, and they should have tried fixing it.

But don’t get me wrong, I’m not defending Sam. In my eyes, they were both guilty. After reading the story, I realized that Love is not as magical as people perceive it to be. In Life, one must not forget about Perseverance, Loyalty, Patience, and Respect.

Submitted by: Francis Damaso

Do you see it? It's fragmented isn't it? I hate that. Ughh.. This has always been my weakness, my ideas are fragmented. Meaning, i can't instill unity in my writings. The ideas are all mixed up, examples are a mess, the clinching sentences were made as if a ten-year-old picked up a pen and started writing, and sentences are not connected. Help me. please. How can i improve my writing? If only my mind had a "Defragger" like computers do. Let me know 'cause i want to improve. :)